I remember once
you leaning against my chest
between my legs
in October
I dyed your hair
you wanted platinum but
were graced gold
in September
I held you close
it was cold and we were warm
your laughter rich
in the night
I whispered jokes
as we watched the stage
you cheered loudest
in the crowd
I never told you
how my breath fell short
my blood pounding
in my thighs
I gave you gifts
you accepted with joy except
the black triangle
in my heart
I waited for you
because you ran out of fear
(that might not be true
in retrospect)
You gave me
a single kiss and confession
but broke my heart
in August
© christine DINGLEY 2011
I like this flow. Usually I dislike too many specific pronouns, especially “I”, but this actually works quite well.
Thank you! I was a bit nervous about the use of “I” as first word of every stanza, but I’m glad you liked it.
I love the bracketed “that might not be true in retrospect” – good poem.
Thanks! I was writing this about a girl I once knew, and as I was writing that stanza, those lines were whispered into my head. Glad to see it was a hit!
I wish I could say something more intelligent than “I really like this poem, I keep re-reading it,” but that’s the limit of my thought process today.
No worries, we all have those days. Glad to see you’re part of my readership, though!